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김순님/2025-02-25

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In my case, There were many things I had to hurt my feeling. In-laws family required me a lot. If I had a job I could have avoided that situations. I am having a good time now.but it is because my husband's success. If I can be born again I will go to university and have a job. It is more valuable life . I think high- leveled- graduated students can have successful feeling during working.
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Ms. SUnny!
Thank you for sharing this. I understand what you are trying to say. Many people are also in your situation and I think we could ease the situation by following what we desire. Take note: live life to the fullest so there will be no regrets.
Aki~


In my case, There were many things I had to hurt my feelings.
>>> CORRECT!

In-laws family required me a lot.
>>> My family-in-law demands a lot from me.

If I had a job I could have avoided that situations.
>>> If I had a job I could have avoided those situations.

I am having a good time now.but it is because my husband's success.
>>> I am having a good time now. but it is because of my husband's success.

If I can be born again I will go to university and have a job.
>>> If I got a chance to be born again, I want to go to university and get a job.

It is more valuable life .
>>> It is a valuable life.

I think high- leveled- graduated students can have successful feeling during working.
>>> I think high- leveled- graduated students can have successful feelings while working.

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