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leader's dignity

권경희/2025-01-17

회원님의 올려주신 영작문
These days I have a lot of worries when I look at the leaders in the world including Korea. America, Russia , Israel and Korea and so on around in the world many abnormal person are becoming leader . Owing to them, the world is dander and misery. They have one common, they never reflect their wrong belief and delusional behavior.
강사님의 첨삭교정 내용
Good afternoon, Ms. Lily!
Leaders today face many challenges, but unfortunately, when they reach a "checkmate" situation, some abuse their power by enforcing rules that ordinary people are unable to resist.
Thank you for sharing this. Have a great weekend!
Aki~



These days I have a lot of worries when I look at the leaders in the world including Korea.
>>> CORRECT!

America, Russia, Israel and Korea and so on around in the world many abnormal person are becoming leader .
>>> America, Russia, Israel Korea, and so on around the world many abnormal people are becoming leaders.

Owing to them, the world is dander and misery.
>>>  Owing to them, the world is dangerous and miserable.

They have one common, they never reflect their wrong belief and delusional behavior.
>>> CORRECT!
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