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What’s the most memorable family gathering you’ve attended?

임주미/2025-01-15

회원님의 올려주신 영작문
My father came to my house last year on January before he went away with my siblings came too. we ate delicious food all together and sang a song. A few month ago I saw the vidio , my dad song along with beat. That was last time when we saw him in my father was health. Sometimes I think and miss my parents
강사님의 첨삭교정 내용
Hello, Ju Mi! You must've missed your parents very much. It's good to reminisce memorable moments with our family from time to time.^^ Thank you for sharing this memory. See you in class!
~T. Jewel
My father came to my house last year on January before he went away with my siblings came too.
>>My father came to my house with my siblings last year before he passed away.
we ate delicious food all together and sang a song.
>>We ate delicious food together and sang songs.
A few month ago I saw the vidio , my dad song along with beat.
>>A few months ago, I saw the video where my dad sang along with the beat.
That was last time when we saw him in my father was health.
>>That was the last time we saw our father healthy.
OR
>>That was the last time we saw our father in good health.
Sometimes I think and miss my parents
>>Sometimes, I think about my parents and miss them.

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