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권경희/2025-01-14

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When we need usually something we choose to rent or buy. Then what is the mean to rental partners ? If we can buy partners instead of rental, how do this world become? Is this the world that human makes happy? I wonder that rental parnters solve their loneliness.
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Hello Ms. Lily!
Thank you for sharing your thoughts. 
I am amused on your answers and questions that made my think as well.
See you later!
Aki~


When we need usually something we choose to rent or buy.
>>> CORRECT!
OR >> People are opted to use their resources when they need something.

Then what is the mean to rental partners?
>>>  Then how about those availing the rental partners?

If we can buy partners instead of rental, how do this world become?
>>> If we can buy partners instead of rentals, how would the world change?

Is this the world that human makes happy?
>>> Is this the world that makes humans happy?

I wonder that rental parnters solve their loneliness.
>>> I wonder if those rental partners solve their loneliness.
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