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What is the best thing about your job?
이지윤/2025-01-15
회원님의 올려주신 영작문
Well, the fact that I can meet a lot of handsome people? HAHAHA, I'm joking.
The best thing about my job is that I can have a lot of special experiences.
My job is peculiarly in the army. That's why I can have a lot of special experience as a computer engineer, dealing with special equipment and using programs different from ordinary equipment.
It's also about being abble to take pride.
All the coworkers I work with take pride in their jobs. And they also have a special pride in working for the country and people because they work for the army.
강사님의 첨삭교정 내용
Hi!
Thank you for sharing your answer. You got me in the first sentence.
. Anyway, I really enjoyed reading your essay, and I can tell you’re passionate about your job. The way you described the pride you and your coworkers take in serving the country is inspiring.
~ Teacher Gina
Thank you for sharing your answer. You got me in the first sentence.
. Anyway, I really enjoyed reading your essay, and I can tell you’re passionate about your job. The way you described the pride you and your coworkers take in serving the country is inspiring.~ Teacher Gina
Well, the fact that I can meet a lot of handsome people? HAHAHA, I'm joking.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: Well, I could say meeting a lot of handsome people, but I'm joking.
>> Or: Well, I could say meeting a lot of handsome people, but I'm joking.
The best thing about my job is that I can have a lot of special experiences.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: The greatest thing about my job is the opportunity to have unique experiences.
>> Or: The greatest thing about my job is the opportunity to have unique experiences.
My job is peculiarly in the army.
>> My job is peculiar in the army.
>> Or: My job is quite unique because it is in the army.
That's why I can have a lot of special experience as a computer engineer, dealing with special equipment and using programs different from ordinary equipment.
>> This allows me to gain unique experiences as a computer engineer, working with specialized equipment and using programs that differ from standard ones.
It's also about being abble to take pride.
>> It's also about being able to take pride in what I do.
All the coworkers I work with take pride in their jobs.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: All my coworkers take pride in their work.
>> Or: All my coworkers take pride in their work.
And they also have a special pride in working for the country and people because they work for the army.
>> They also feel a deep sense of pride in serving the country and its people through their work in the army.
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