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The homework of 10th Jan.

조윤호/2025-01-13

회원님의 올려주신 영작문

Q : What have you realized and learned from last year ? A : Last year, as a newcomer of company, i learned many things. First, i learned how to control my emotions. Especially to my boss. Second, i learned that after hard working, i can get a reward. Also, i realized that i have to live a busy life this year for getting more rewards. So, i will learn english hard in first half and exercise in second half this year.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hello, Mr. Eddie! It's good to know about your goals this year and realizations from last year. Good luck!

-T. Sonny

Last year, as a newcomer of company, i learned many things.

>>Last year, as a newcomer to the company, I learned many things.

First, i learned how to control my emotions.

>>Correct!

Especially to my boss.

>>This is especially true when interacting with my boss.

Second, i learned that after hard working, i can get a reward.

>>Second, I learned that after working hard, I deserve some kind of reward.

Also, i realized that i have to live a busy life this year for getting more rewards.

>>Also, I realized that I have to live a busy life this year to get more rewards.

So, i will learn english hard in first half and exercise in second half this year.

>>So, I will learn English hard in the first half of the year and exercise in the second half.

OR.

I'll spend the first part of the year enhancing my English skills and the latter part focusing on fitness.