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Which is your busiest day of the week?

이현준/2025-01-09

회원님의 올려주신 영작문

Before the winter vacation, school days were the busiest. Because i had to wake up early everyday. And afterschool, i went to the gym. I felt everyday was too long. But after the winter vacation, friday and weekend is the busiest. Because i go to the part-time job at friday and weekend.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi Jun!

I appreciate your effort in doing your homework.

I would like to emphasize how you used the "after winter vacation"- You should use WHEN WINTER VACATION HAS STARTED". For now, your winter vacation is not over yet, right?

Please take note of this. Have a happy learning!

T. Aki~

Before the winter vacation, school days were the busiest.

>> CORRECT!

Because i had to wake up early everyday. And afterschool, i went to the gym.

>>> Because I had to wake up early every day. And after school, I went to the gym.

I felt everyday was too long.

>>> I felt every day was too long.

But after the winter vacation, friday and weekend is the busiest.

>>> But when the winter vacation has started, Fridays and weekends are the busiest.

Because i go to the part-time job at friday and weekend.

<<< Because I go to my part-time job on Fridays and weekends.