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Please change difficult words to easy words and correct them so that IELTS Speaking 6.5 or higher sc

이영인/2025-01-08

회원님의 올려주신 영작문

Do you have any hobbies?Did you have any hobbies when you were a child?à Yes, I enjoy reading and taking walks in my free time. When I was a child, I loved drawing andplaying with building blocks, but my interests have changed as I grew older.Do you have the same hobbies as your family members?Do you have a hobby that you've had since childhood?à Some hobbies, like watching movies, are shared with my family, but I’ve had my own hobby ofplaying the piano since childhood. It’s something I truly enjoy and find relaxing. What kind of advertising do you like?Do you like advertisements?Do you see a lot of advertising on trains or other transport?à I enjoy creative and entertaining ads, especially with a good story. While I likesome, too many on public transport can be overwhelming. Memorable ads standout with humor, emotion, or something that grabs attention.

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~T. Jenna

Do you have any hobbies?Did you have any hobbies when you were a child?

Yes, I enjoy reading and taking walks in my free time. When I was a child, I loved drawing andplaying with building blocks, but my interests have changed as I grew older.

>>Yes, I have some pastimes that I relish during my spare time. For instance, I love reading books, and I also enjoy going for walks because it helps me relax. When I was a child, I had different hobbies. I really liked drawing and being creative, and I also spent a lot of time playing with building blocks. However, as I grew older, my interests have changed, and I now focus on activities that suit my current lifestyle.

Do you have the same hobbies as your family members?Do you have a hobby that you've had since childhood?

Some hobbies, like watching movies, are shared with my family, but I’ve had my own hobby ofplaying the piano since childhood. It’s something I truly enjoy and find relaxing.

>>Certain pastimes, such as watching movies, are shared with my family, as we often bond over that activity. However, one personal pursuit I’ve maintained since childhood is playing the piano. It’s something I deeply cherish and find incredibly soothing, allowing me to express myself creatively over the years.

What kind of advertising do you like?Do you like advertisements?Do you see a lot of advertising on trains or other transport?

I enjoy creative and entertaining ads, especially with a good story. While I likesome, too many on public transport can be overwhelming. Memorable ads standout with humor, emotion, or something that grabs attention.

>>I am into creative and engaging advertisements, especially those that tell a compelling story. While I do like some ads, I find that seeing too many on public transport can be a bit overwhelming. The most memorable ones are those that use humor, evoke strong emotions, or have a unique element that captures attention.