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Working holiday get to new things in new country.
서다은/2025-01-04
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Working holiday get to new things in new country.
And We can experience different cultures and languages than Korea.
So, I think Working holiday benefits get a new insight.
It’s hard to quit the job and get a new job to myself in other regions.
That is adventure in my life.
However, If I will get this goals that valuable experience in this adventure!!
강사님의 첨삭교정 내용
Hello, Da Eun~
When I learned about it, I had just a year to be eligible for the working holiday. And because they only take 100 people, there is fierce competition among Filipinos for admission. For me, it's a positive experience to advance our careers, therefore I hope you achieve this objective. ^^
Chammy
Working holiday get to new things in new country.
>> A working holiday allows us to experience new things in a foreign country
And We can experience different cultures and languages than Korea.
And We can experience different cultures and languages than Korea.
>>We can also encounter languages and cultures other than Korean.
So, I think Working holiday benefits get a new insight.
So, I think Working holiday benefits get a new insight.
>> So, I think that working holiday benefits provide a new insight
It’s hard to quit the job and get a new job to myself in other regions.
It’s hard to quit the job and get a new job to myself in other regions.
>> It's hard to leave the job and get another one in other regions.
That is adventure in my life.
That is adventure in my life.
>> This makes my life an adventure.
However, If I will get this goals that valuable experience in this adventure!!
However, If I will get this goals that valuable experience in this adventure!!
>> But if I succeed in achieving these goals, I will gain valuable experience on this adventure!
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