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조보현/2024-12-30

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Hi Victorina!

Here's the edited compostion. Check it out and let me know your thoughts. Have a good night's sleep! 

Cheers, 
Jean ~~




I want to be pastry chef after 10 years. 
>>> I want to be a pastry chef after 10 years. 

From I started having a dream, I'm always make effort to close my dream. 
>>> I'm the kind of person who would chase my dream no matter what. 

I'm learning confectionery, baking at the school. 
>>> I'm learning confectionery and baking at school.

I have to standing, moving for the class time. 
>>> I have to stand and move a lot during the class.

So I can't take a rest middle of class time but in order to achieve my dream, I'm studying and reviewing pastry theory hard, studying English to go to aborde study. 
>>> That's why I can't take a rest in the middle of the class but to achieve my dream, I'm studying and reviewing pastry theory hard and studying English at the same time so I can go abroad. 

And study French fine dessert and plating.
>>> Also, I'm studying French fine dessert and plating. 
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