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We neet time do nothing.

이아형/2024-12-23

회원님의 올려주신 영작문

Recently, People get to be stimulated everything. In the world there are so many things that can see, listen, feel for short time. For example senstionalist news like gossip, stimulating video like advertising in the digital world. So peopel have been seen just the things that they want to see theirselves. They can't a variety of perspectives because getting limited information. They can't read long articel and tolerate long time to do nothing. And they have been lost consentration ablilty. I think people need mediatating time. It it time nothing to do.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Happy Monday Ms. Ella! Monday provides an opportunity to reflect on your goals for the week ahead. If you are working on something that you really care about, you don’t have to be pushed. The vision pulls you! Keep your balance!

>>> TEACHER GEMMA

Recently, People get to be stimulated everything.

>>> Recently, people get to be stimulated by everything.

In the world there are so many things that can see, listen, feel for short time.

>>> In today's world, there are countless things to see, hear, and feel, but often for short time.

For example senstionalist news like gossip, stimulating video like advertising in the digital world.

>>> For example, sensational news like gossip or attention-grabbing advertisements dominate the digital world.

So peopel have been seen just the things that they want to see theirselves.

>>> So people tend to consume only what aligns with their personal preferences, limiting their exposure to diverse perspectives.

They can't a variety of perspectives because getting limited information.

>>> They can't gain a variety of perspectives because they are exposed to limited information.

They can't read long articel and tolerate long time to do nothing.

>>> They struggle to read long articles and find it difficult to tolerate extended periods of inactivity.

And they have been lost consentration ablilty.

>>>As a result, they have lost their ability to concentrate.

It it time nothing to do.

>>> It is a time to do nothing.

I think people need mediatating time.

> I believe people need meditation.