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What are the benefits of having smoking areas in workplaces?

이승훈/2024-12-17

회원님의 올려주신 영작문
Currently i quit smoking about 2 month. smoking area in workplaces benefits are many adventage. fisrt, smoking area is seperate far away form non-smoker. so smoker don't have to attention to no smoker. second, smoking area is located top loof. so it's helpful about walking excercise. third, sharing information with co-workers and easy friendly. but smoke is not healty.
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Hi, Hun!
You are right! Even though having a smoking area in a company is good because it can separate smokers from non-smokers and promote friendliness among colleagues, smoking is still unhealthy. Therefore, if it's possible to encourage people to stop smoking, that should be where the company focuses.
- T. Caitlyn 
Currently i quit smoking about 2 month.
>> Currently, I have quit smoking for about 2 months.
smoking area in workplaces benefits are many adventage.
>> There are many advantages to having a smoking area in the workplace.
fisrt, smoking area is seperate far away form non-smoker.
>> First, the smoking area is separated far away from non-smokers.
so smoker don't have to attention to no smoker.
>> So smokers don't have to pay attention to non-smokers.
second, smoking area is located top loof.
>> Second, the smoking area is located on the top floor.
so it's helpful about walking excercise.
>> So it's helpful for walking exercise.
third, sharing information with co-workers and easy friendly.
>> Third, it allows sharing information with co-workers and promotes friendliness.
but smoke is not healty.
>> But smoking is unhealthy.
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