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Elitism of doctors and prosecutors

양기연/2024-12-16

회원님의 올려주신 영작문
There are a few reasons why they have a heightened elitism. First,they graduated from top universities with good grades. Actuallu most of them graduated from S.K.Y universities. Second they think that they had to make even more efforts to finish the course required to be a doctor or prosecutor than the workers in any profession and that's why they should be treated differently from the other workers. Third, they have the highest income and opportunity to be famous. Lastly they have been offered special positions by authorities and governments.
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Hi, Gi Yean!
I see! I really think that in Korea, graduating from one of the top three prestigious universities is a big deal. I also think society is at fault because they have made it seem that these universities and professions are considered elite. The public has made them feel that they are special, thus making them feel entitled. I was just wondering whether the increase in the number of doctors will make elitism die down.
- T. Caitlyn 
There are a few reasons why they have a heightened elitism. 
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First,they graduated from top universities with good grades. 
>> CORRECT 
Actually, most of them graduated from S.K.Y universities. 
>> CORRECT 
Second they think that they had to make even more efforts to finish the course required to be a doctor or prosecutor than the workers in any profession and that's why they should be treated differently from the other workers. 
>> Second, they think that they had to make even more effort to finish the courses required to be a doctor or prosecutor than workers in any other profession, and that's why they should be treated differently from other workers.
Third, they have the highest income and opportunity to be famous. 
>> CORRECT 
Lastly, they have been offered special positions by authorities and governments.
>> CORRECT 
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