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류영주/2024-12-11

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Q: What does it take to own a café? A: I think it takes a lot of money, time, and efforts. I think building the cafe and decorating it will take a lot of money, and since there would be a lot of customers, they would be busy all day. Also, they need to keep the cafe clean, so it would require a lot of efforts.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hello, Paul!

I totally agree that it requires a lot of money and effort, especially when it comes to building and decorating the space. It’s also true that keeping everything clean and running smoothly can be a lot of work, but it’s also what makes a cafe enjoyable for customers. I like how you mentioned the busy days too – it's definitely not easy to keep up with the demands, but the reward is seeing happy customers! Keep up the great work!

~ Teacher Trixia

CONTENT:

I think it takes a lot of money, time, and efforts.

- I think it takes a lot of money, time, and effort to own a cafe.

I think building the cafe and decorating it will take a lot of money, and since there would be a lot of customers, they would be busy all day.

- CORRECT.

>>> OR: Investing is a must in building and decorating the space, which could be expensive. Since cafes often have many customers, the staff would be busy all day serving them.

Also, they need to keep the cafe clean, so it would require a lot of efforts.

- Also, maintaining cleanliness and creating a welcoming environment would require a lot of effort.