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Please change difficult words to easy words and correct them so that IELTS Speaking 6.5 or higher sc

이영인/2024-12-09

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Do schools in your country have music lessons? Do a lot of people like music? Do you think music education is important for children? Do you think children should learn to play an instrument at school? What musical instruments do you enjoy listening to the most? Have you ever learned to play a musical instrument? Yes, most schools in my country offer music lessons. Many people love music, and I believe music education is essential for children. It’s also great if children can learn to play an instrument. I enjoy listening to the piano and guitar, and I’ve tried learning the piano in the past. Do you prefer to watch films at home or in the cinema? How often do you watch films? I prefer to watch films at home because it's more comfortable, and I can relax without distractions. I usually watch films once or twice a week, depending on my schedule.

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Thank you for entrusting me to simplify your answers Young In. I hope you'll be able to remember all these responses. Good luck!
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
Do schools in your country have music lessons?
Do a lot of people like music?
Do you think music education is important for children?
Do you think children should learn to play an instrument at school?
What musical instruments do you enjoy listening to the most?
Have you ever learned to play a musical instrument?

>>>Yes, most schools in my country have music lessons. Many people love music, and I think it’s important for kids to learn. It’s also great if they can play an instrument. I like listening and learning the piano and guitar.

Do you prefer to watch films at home or in the cinema?
How often do you watch films?
>>>I prefer watching films at home because it's more comfortable and I can relax without distractions. I usually watch films once or twice a week, depending on my schedule.