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Whys is it important for people to save money? Explain.

박소은/2024-12-05

회원님의 올려주신 영작문

It's important to save money because if we save money we can use money when we need but if we didn't saved money we can't use money when we need money.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi Sunny!

Try expressing your thoughts in different ways.

The English language is rich with vocabulary and expressions.

You have to explore a bit.^^

~~ Teacher Sharon

It's important to save money because if we save money we can use money when we need but if we didn't saved money we can't use money when we need money.

>> It's important to save money because if we save money, we can use that money when we need it but if we don't save money, there would be nothing to use when we do need it.