I think that the possibility of my life is depending on my will. Because my second life will be started from the wedding march. I would like to get a new job before the wedding so I want to support my boyfriend to pay the things that related to wedding. Having some communication with my boyfriend made me stronger than alone. We have promised that each other have to support and trust the things we do. To increse my potential, I continually do the my work to growp my self. Thanks for reading my essay.

Hello Gloria,

You did a great job with your essay! It's clear that you're thinking deeply about your future and the important steps you're taking toward your goals. I really admire how you're planning to get a new job before the wedding and supporting your boyfriend, this shows maturity and teamwork. You’re absolutely right that your life’s possibilities depend on your will and determination. You’re already showing that you’re strong and capable of achieving great things. You’re so smart, and I can tell that you have the mindset to make your dreams a reality. Keep believing in yourself, because you can achieve anything you desire. Your hard work and commitment will pay off. Keep up the great work, you're on an amazing journey!

~Teacher Cathy

 

I think that the possibility of my life is depending on my will.

>>CORRECT

OR>>I think that the possibilities in my life depend on my will.

Because my second life will be started from the wedding march.

>>Because I will begin a new life when the wedding march plays.

I would like to get a new job before the wedding so I want to support my boyfriend to pay the things that related to wedding.

>>I would like to get a new job before the wedding so I can help my boyfriend pay for the wedding-related expenses.

Having some communication with my boyfriend made me stronger than alone.

>>Having communication with my boyfriend made me feel stronger than being alone.

We have promised that each other have to support and trust the things we do.

>>We promised to support and trust each other in everything we do.

To increse my potential, I continually do the my work to growp my self.

>>To increase my potential, I continually do my work to grow myself.

Thanks for reading my essay.

>>CORRECT

OR>>Thank you for reading my essay.