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Why do many people from different parts of the world want to improve their English?

김예린/2024-12-04

회원님의 올려주신 영작문
English is an international language that influences a lot. When we meet foreigners, we usually use English to conversation. Furthermore, we need to learn language that many people use, especially the power nation's; USA. If so, when it comes to earning money or study, we can get many chance to do. Also in terms of learning second language, It's easy to learn English. In my case, I want to improve English because of confidence. I was afraid of going aboard before today because I was scared of opening a new world. Of course I need to improve it for my job and future. Being good at English in Korea is very important and can do many more things.
강사님의 첨삭교정 내용
Hi, Lin! Impressive points about the importance of learning English and how it can open up many opportunities. It's inspiring to see your motivation to improve your English for confidence, travel, and your future. Keep working hard, and you'll reach your goals!
~T. Jenna

English is an international language that influences a lot. 
Correct, or
>>English is a global language that holds significant influence.
When we meet foreigners, we usually use English to conversation. 
>>When we meet foreigners, we usually use English for conversation.
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>>When we meet people from other countries, English is usually our go-to for conversation.
Furthermore, we need to learn language that many people use, especially the power nation's; USA. 
>> Furthermore, we need to learn a language that many people use, especially the powerful nation's language: the USA.
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>>Furthermore, it is essential to acquire a language that is widely spoken, particularly that of influential nations such as the United States.
If so, when it comes to earning money or study, we can get many chance to do. 
>>If so, when it comes to earning money or studying, we can get / have many chances / opportunities.
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>>In that case, when it comes to making money or studying, we open ourselves up to countless opportunities.
Also in terms of learning second language, it's easy to learn English. 
Correct, or
>>In terms of acquiring a second language, English is comparatively straightforward to learn.
In my case, I want to improve English because of confidence. 
>>In my case, I want to improve my English for confidence.
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>>Personally, I strive to enhance my English proficiency to bolster my self-assurance.
I was afraid of going aboard before today because I was scared of opening a new world. 
>>I was afraid of going abroad before today because I was scared of stepping into a new world.
OR
>>Previously, I was apprehensive about going overseas as I feared venturing into an unfamiliar world.
Of course I need to improve it for my job and future. 
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>>Undoubtedly, enhancing my English skills is vital for my professional development and future opportunities.
Being good at English in Korea is very important and can do many more things.
>>Being good at English in Korea is very important and can open up many more opportunities.
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>>Being proficient in English in Korea is crucial and opens up many doors.
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