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Which country would be the most enjoyable to live in? What makes it a fun place?

김영경/2024-11-27

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I don’t have many countries that I have been to so far. Among those countries, Philippines is one of the most enjoyable countries because it has scenic environment wherever I went. All foods and accommodation were affordable. I though that it can’t be that bad to live here after retirement with my wife. The other country that I spent the enjoyable days is Japan. Although I had a hard time make a conversation with them due to language barrier. I was impressed by friendly and kind attitude. On top of that, Japan has many things in common with Korea, and also good history and culture that Koreans need to learn. It is sure that Japan is one of the developed countries in the world. So If I am equipped with Japanese skills enough to talk to them, It would be a good country that I can live in.
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Hello, Mr. Steve! The most enjoyable country to live in depends on what you value most but surely, each of these countries offers a unique experience that might cater to your preferences.
-T. Sonny
I don’t have many countries that I have been to so far. 
>>I've never been to many countries so far.
Among those countries, Philippines is one of the most enjoyable countries because it has scenic environment wherever I went. 
>>Among those countries, the Philippines is one of the most enjoyable countries because it has a scenic environment wherever I go. 
All foods and accommodation were affordable. 
>>All the food and accommodation were affordable. 
I though that it can’t be that bad to live here after retirement with my wife. 
>>I thought that it can’t be that bad to live here after retirement with my wife. 
The other country that I spent the enjoyable days is Japan. 
>>The other country where I spent enjoyable days is Japan. 
Although I had a hard time make a conversation with them due to language barrier. 
>>Even though I had a hard time communicating with them due to the language barrier. 
I was impressed by friendly and kind attitude. 
>>I was impressed by their friendly and kind attitude. 
On top of that, Japan has many things in common with Korea, and also good history and culture that Koreans need to learn. 
>>On top of that, Japan has many things in common with Korea, and also good history and culture that Koreans need to learn from. 
It is sure that Japan is one of the developed countries in the world. 
>>It is sure that Japan is one of the most developed countries in the world. 
So If I am equipped with Japanese skills enough to talk to them, It would be a good country that I can live in.
>>So If I am equipped with Japanese skills enough to talk to them, it would be a good country to live in.
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