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양윤영/2024-11-22

회원님의 올려주신 영작문

I think it’s about making healthy eating habits. Many people exposed to processed foods and a lots of junk foods. This bring about adversely affect in body. So, we have to make effort lessen unhealthy foods.

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Hello Yun!

Thanks for doing your best. Thanks for making an effort to answer all the homework questions this week. You were great! See you next week! ^^

~~Teacher Kate

I think it’s about making healthy eating habits.

>>CORRECT!
Many people exposed to processed foods and a lots of junk foods.

>>Many people are exposed to processed foods and lots of junk foods.
This bring about adversely affect in body.

>>This has adverse effects on our body.
So, we have to make effort lessen unhealthy foods.

>>So, we have to make an effort to lessen our consumption of unhealthy foods.