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11/15(Fri) homework

김태희/2024-11-15

회원님의 올려주신 영작문
How do you see Korea’s role in the global community? I think Korea has become a small part of the global community nowadays. Korea was a developing country in the 1980s. We have many hardships and crises such as the IMF. However, Korea overcame many difficulties and grew up so much. I am very proud of the ancestors' challenges and achievements. Also, I feel proud when I hear some news of famous Koreans working abroad. Some companies, athletes, singers, and actors are working hard abroad and are being recognized for their efforts. I also want to be a part of my global research field. When I present my work at an international conference and society, I have a mindset that I am representing Korea.
강사님의 첨삭교정 내용
Hi, Nicole!
Thank you for sharing. Korea is known for many great things. I believe this is only the beginning of Korea's noble history.
~ Trixia

CONTENT:
I think Korea has become a small part of the global community nowadays.
- I think Korea has become an important part of the global community nowadays.
Korea was a developing country in the 1980s.
- CORRECT.
We have many hardships and crises such as the IMF.
- We faced many hardships and crises, such as the IMF crisis.
However, Korea overcame many difficulties and grew up so much.
- However, Korea overcame these challenges and has grown significantly.
I am very proud of the ancestors' challenges and achievements.
- I am filled with pride of the challenges and achievements of our ancestors.
Also, I feel proud when I hear some news of famous Koreans working abroad.
- I also feel proud when I hear about famous Koreans succeeding abroad.
Some companies, athletes, singers, and actors are working hard abroad and are being recognized for their efforts.
- Many companies, athletes, singers, and actors are working hard overseas and are being recognized for their efforts.
I also want to be a part of my global research field.
- I, too, want to contribute to the global research field.
When I present my work at an international conference and society, I have a mindset that I am representing Korea.
- When I present my work at international conferences and forums, I approach it with the mindset that I am representing Korea.
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