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What do you think you could learn or gain by going to a new country, even if it feels scary?

김예린/2024-11-11

회원님의 올려주신 영작문

I can gain new situation which is unpredictable, so that can makes me strong. I can be more strengthen executive ability and can be no longer afraid of change. Because when we go new country, we can't control anything. We should be brave and take responsibility. And we can also learn their own culture, minds, ect.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hey, Lin! Nice job! I love how you're thinking about how new, unpredictable situations can help you grow stronger. Embracing change and learning from different cultures is a great mindset! Keep it up, you're doing awesome!

~T. Jenna

I can gain new situation which is unpredictable, so that can makes me strong.

>>I can gain new, unpredictable situations, which can make me stronger.

>> I can embrace new, unpredictable situations, which will help me grow stronger and better equipped for anything that comes my way.

I can be more strengthen executive ability and can be no longer afraid of change.

>>I can strengthen my executive ability and no longer be afraid of change.

>>I can enhance my executive capabilities and cultivate a greater resilience towards change.

Because when we go new country, we can't control anything.

>>Because when we go to a new country, we can't control anything.

>>Because when we go to a new country, we’re stepping into the unknown, where we can't control anything.

We should be brave and take responsibility.

>>We should be brave and take on responsibility.

>>We should demonstrate courage and embrace our duties.

And we can also learn their own culture, minds, ect.

>>We can also learn about their culture, mindset, etc.

>>We can also gain insights into their culture, mindset, and other fundamental aspects of their way of life.