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What are the most common organizations in your country and what are they for?

한다연/2024-11-05

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The most common organizations in my country are frendship club to hang out with strangers. I can contact with these clubs easily in my ages. There are so many kinds of frendship club etc. dancing, reading a book, playing a board game, watching a movie and so on. There are almost universtiy students who want to make a new friend. It can help students to make communication skills with other unversity students. Also, they can have confident to speak in front of strangers. I think they are great organizations for unversity students.
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Hi Nicole,
Thank you for sharing your thoughts about this topic. You did well. Remember practice makes perfect :)
See you again next time!
~ T. Demi ^^

The most common organizations in my country are frendship club to hang out with strangers.
>> The most common organizations in my country are friendship clubs to hang out with strangers.
I can contact with these clubs easily in my ages.
>> I can easily get in touch with these clubs with people my age.
There are so many kinds of frendship club etc. dancing, reading a book, playing a board game, watching a movie and so on.
>> There are many kinds of friendship clubs, such as dancing, reading books, playing board games, watching movies, and so on.
There are almost universtiy students who want to make a new friend.
>> Almost all university students want to make new friends.
It can help students to make communication skills with other unversity students.
>> It can help students develop communication skills with other university students.
Also, they can have confident to speak in front of strangers.
>> They can also gain confidence in speaking in front of strangers.
I think they are great organizations for unversity students.
>> I believe these organizations are excellent resources for university students.
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