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Should kids have more of a say in decisions made by their community or country?

박소은/2024-10-21

회원님의 올려주신 영작문
Yes because if only adolts have an decisions kids are sad.
강사님의 첨삭교정 내용
Hi Sunny!
I get the gist of your ideas.
However, I think that would be expressed better with examples.
Don't shy away from explaining what your main idea is. 
~~ Teacher Sharon
Yes because if only adolts have an decisions kids are sad.
>> Yes, because kids would be sad if it's only the adults who are making decisions. 
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