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박소은/2024-10-21

회원님의 올려주신 영작문

Yes because if only adolts have an decisions kids are sad.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi Sunny!

I get the gist of your ideas.

However, I think that would be expressed better with examples.

Don't shy away from explaining what your main idea is.

~~ Teacher Sharon

Yes because if only adolts have an decisions kids are sad.

>> Yes, because kids would be sad if it's only the adults who are making decisions.