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I tend to buy things when I'm stressed out. So now that I think about it, there are quite a few useless things in the room. However, I am happy to relieve my stress like that, so I keep it as a memory of my immature enemy.
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Hello, Dahea! 

Great job on your homework. I like how you expressed your feelings about buying things when youre stressed. It shows your honesty and self-reflection. One thing you could improve is using more descriptive words to make your writing richer. Also, try to use complete sentences to make your thoughts clearer. Instead of I am happy to relieve my stress like that, you could say, I feel happy when I buy something to relieve my stress. Keep up the good work, see you later! ^^

~Teacher Cathy 

 

I tend to buy things when I'm stressed out. 

>>CORRECT 

OR>>I often purchase things when I'm feeling stressed. 

So now that I think about it, there are quite a few useless things in the room. 

>>CORRECT 

OR>>Now that I think about it, there are quite a few things in the room that seem useless. 

However, I am happy to relieve my stress like that, so I keep it as a memory of my immature enemy. 

>>CORRECT 

OR>>However, I am happy to relieve my stress in that way, so I keep it as a memory of my immature enemy.