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류건우/2024-10-10

회원님의 올려주신 영작문
Q: What happens after a goal is achieved? A: I think people would feel the accomplishment and fulfillment after achieving goals. Also, I think people would make a new goal, and I think it would be a higher goal because people have desire to become better. I think repeating to make goals and achive them is the process of developing oneself.
강사님의 첨삭교정 내용
Hi, Paul!

Thank you for answering your homework.

~T. Divina^^

Here are some considerations:

1. I think people would feel the accomplishment and fulfillment after achieving goals.
>>CORRECT!

2. Also, I think people would make a new goal, and I think it would be a higher goal because people have desire to become better.
>>Also, I think people would make a new and higher goal, because they have the desire to become better.

3. I think repeating to make goals and achive them is the process of developing oneself.
>>I think the repetition of making goals and achieving them is the process of developing oneself.

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