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Should parents help their children plan their future? Why or why not?

한다연/2024-10-08

회원님의 올려주신 영작문
I think parents help their children plan their future. As a parent, raising their children contains helping their children. I had a lot of assistances from my parents. They gave me a realistic advices so I could get my goal. Children's first teacher is their mom and dad so they always follow their parents. Being a parents contains a big responsibility. So we should think about having a children seriously.
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Hello Nicole,
Thank you for sharing your opinion about the topic matter. You are doing great. Keep it up!
~ T. Demi^^

I think parents help their children plan their future.
>> I think parents can help their children plan their future.
As a parent, raising their children contains helping their children.
>> As a parent, helping their kids is part of raising them.
I had a lot of assistances from my parents.
>> I received a lot of assistance from my parents.
They gave me a realistic advices so I could get my goal.
>> they gave me realistic advice so I could achieve my goal.
Children's first teacher is their mom and dad so they always follow their parents.
>> Children's first teachers are their parents so they always follow them.
Being a parents contains a big responsibility.
>> Parents have significant responsibilities for their children.
So we should think about having a children seriously.
>> Having a child is a serious decision that should be carefully considered.
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