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황선하/2024-10-04

회원님의 올려주신 영작문
I like almost all fruits, and of course include cherries. But I don't buy them often because their seeds are too big, and it makes me difficult to eat them. Moreover, after eat them, my hands remain dyed red. I don't like it. Thus, I prefer other fruits like blueberries or mangos.
강사님의 첨삭교정 내용
Hi Sydney! ^^ 

I like fresh cherries but not canned cherries. 
We don't grow cherries in the Philippines, therefore it is not common in our country. 
I only tried fresh cherries once. 
It really tasted sweet. 
I wish we could have more cherries rather than the canned ones. 

Andrea 

I like almost all fruits, and of course include cherries.
>> I like almost all fruits, and of course this include cherries.

But I don't buy them often because their seeds are too big, and it makes me difficult to eat them. 
>> But I don't buy them often because their seeds are too big which makes it difficult to eat. 

Moreover, after eat them, my hands remain dyed red. I don't like it.
>> Moreover, after eating them, my hands will be dyed red and I don't like it. 

Thus, I prefer other fruits like blueberries or mangos.
>> Thus, I prefer other fruits like blueberries or mangoes. 
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