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What is one hobby you’ve always wanted to try but haven’t yet?

임주미/2024-10-02

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I want to try swimming. A few years ago I had a trip in Singapore, I stayed at the hotel there was swimming pool on the top foor .I saw a foreign granmather ,she was good at swimming At that time I decided to learn swimming.

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Hi, Ju Mi! It’s never too late to try out new things! I hope you can learn swimming. ^^ Thank you and enjoy your Wednesday!

~T. Jewel

I want to try swimming.

>>CORRECT

A few years ago I had a trip in Singapore,

>>A few years ago, I took a trip to Singapore.

I stayed at the hotel.

>>CORRECT
there was swimming pool on the top foor .

>>There was a swimming pool on the top floor.

I saw a foreign granmather ,she was good at swimming

>>I saw a foreign grandmother who was good at swimming.
At that time I decided to learn swimming.

>>At that time, I decided to learn swimming.