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What are your thoughts on field day.

차진혁/2024-09-29

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I think field day is good because children can increase unity with friends. And playing and exercising with friends is fun.
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                           What are your thoughts on field day?


I think field day is good because children can increase unity with friends.
>> OR: I believe a field day is a good thing because it gives kids a chance to learn about unification and working together. 

And playing and exercising with friends is fun.
>> OR: Also, spending a day being active with schoolmates and friends is very exciting. 

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