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The best festival in Korea

김창민/2024-09-10

회원님의 올려주신 영작문

I recommend visiting Andong, where is located in middle of the Korea, to watch special firework. The firework in Andong is very different from what we commonly know. People hang a main rope, made by paper and filled charcoal in, across a river, tie more than hundreds of thin ropes to the main rope, and then ignite it. This firework became famous after being introduced in an entertainment program, and we can watch this special firework every month. I share a picture of this firework. But I recommend finding and watching videos in Youtube. You can be more impressed after you watch videos of "Andong firework" rather than pictures!

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hello, Min!

I watched a short YouTube clip of the Andong fireworks festival and it was so spectacular! Like the photo that you have taken, the fireworks illuminate the dark sky and the river's reflection of the light makes it even more magnificent!

I am sure that people are magnetize to head on to Andong every festival. Thank you for sharing the best festival that you have ever attended,

I cannot say that I have seen a lot of festivals in my country but our Flower Festival is also a must-see. I will tell you more about it in class when I remember.

Thank you so much for this homework. You used several combinations of words and sentences to come up with your very good composition!

See you in class.

-T. Donna~

I recommend visiting Andong, where is located in middle of the Korea, to watch special firework.

>> I recommend visiting Andong which is located in the middle of Korea to watch special fireworks.

The firework in Andong is very different from what we commonly know.

>> The fireworks in Andong is very different from what we commonly know.

People hang a main rope, made by paper and filled charcoal in, across a river, tie more than hundreds of thin ropes to the main rope, and then ignite it.

>> People hang the main rope made by paper and filled charcoal in it across a river, tie more than hundreds of thin ropes to the main rope, and then ignite it. Very good sentence!

This firework became famous after being introduced in an entertainment program, and we can watch this special firework every month.

>> Correct!

Or: fireworks

I share a picture of this firework. But I recommend finding and watching videos in Youtube.

>> I shared a picture of this fireworks. But I recommend finding and watching videos on Youtube.

You can be more impressed after you watch videos of "Andong firework" rather than pictures!

>> Correct!