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Do you want to travel to outer space? Why, or why not?

이강임/2024-09-10

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Of course, I want to travel to outer space. Why? There is no reason. It's too obvious. Every time I look at the sky, I feel how beautiful, amazing and mysterious it is. especially, stars that seem to be pouring down on me make me have ecstatic dreams. If I traveled to the outer space and I could see them up close, It would be an unforgettable experience. Now our humanity can go to the Mars and 'SpaceX' will takes human to the Mars. Maybe some people is possible thing to travel to outer space soon.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Good afternoon, Audrey!

(^_^)

Space tourism refers to human space flight for recreational purposes.

Tourists are motivated by the opportunity to see Earth from space, feel weightlessness, experience tremendous speed and something unexpected, and contribute to science.

Before venturing into space, space tourists must be in good physical condition. They may have to learn how to operate and even repair elements of the spaceship using simulators.

Thank you for finding time to answer your homework. See you later in class!^^

__T. Mayleen :)

Of course, I want to travel to outer space.

>>> CORRECT
Why? There is no reason. It's too obvious.

>>> Why? The reason is too obvious.
Every time I look at the sky, I feel how beautiful, amazing and mysterious it is.

>>> Every time I look at the sky, I feel how beautiful, amazing, and mysterious it is.

especially, stars that seem to be pouring down on me make me have ecstatic dreams.

>>> Particularly, the stars that appear to be pouring down upon me create ecstatic dreams.

If I traveled to the outer space and I could see them up close,
It would be an unforgettable experience.

>>> If I traveled to outer space and I could see them up close, it would be an unforgettable experience.

>>> OR: It would be an amazing experience if I could visit them in space and have up-close views.

Now our humanity can go to the Mars and 'SpaceX' will takes human to the Mars.

>>> Now humans can go to Mars, and 'SpaceX' will take humans to Mars.
Maybe some people is possible thing to travel to outer space soon.

>>> Maybe some people will be able to travel to outer space soon.

>>> OR: It's possible that someday people may be able to go to space.