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What challenges do people with disability face?

김보연/2024-09-20

회원님의 올려주신 영작문
There are some people with disability around the world. Whenever I meet them on the road, I feel it's can be hard to move to other place for them. Especially someone who ride wheels can feel uncomfortable to move everywhere cause of less safety device. They also face negative perception from some people. So we need to have campaign to change public perception of people with disability.
강사님의 첨삭교정 내용
Hello, Betty!
I agree that we must change the way we view individuals with disabilities as they occasionally experience discrimination as well. Rather than feeling sorry for them, we should encourage and empower them.
Chammy 

There are some people with disability around the world. 
OR
>> People with disabilities exist all around the world.
Whenever I meet them on the road, I feel it's can be hard to move to other place for them. 
>> Whenever I meet them on the road, I feel it can be hard to move to other places for them. 
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>> When I encounter them on the road, I get a sense of difficulty for them to freely move.
Especially someone who ride wheels can feel uncomfortable to move everywhere cause of less safety device. 
>>It can be difficult for someone who rides wheels to go around because there are fewer safety features.
They also face negative perception from some people. 
>>Correct
So we need to have campaign to change public perception of people with disability.
>>So we need to have a campaign to change the public perception of people with disability.
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