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Hanbok is the most proud culture of South Korea.

김창민/2024-09-07

회원님의 올려주신 영작문

I get a pride as a Korean when I wear a Hanbok, what is traditional clothes in Korea. I think Hanbok is the most beautiful clothes in the world! So I bought 6 Hanboks because I want to wear when I meet my friends and travel to another cites or foreign countries. I have a black-colored Hanbok with a jumpsuit type. This Hanbok is very comfortable, so I usually wear this when I travel. Actually I traveled Paris last year with this Hanbok, and it was in harmony with the scenery of Paris.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi there, Min!

I am so proud of you taking pride of your national South Korean traditional clothing Hanbok. It is highly recognizable as an Oriental or Eastern style with its unique fabric texture and design. I have never heard of one person who takes pride in wearing the Hanbok as you. You are a patriot!

Usually, I see your countrymen wear your Hanbok during the parade in my city with fuchsia, neon green. among many others along with the beat of your special drums.

I wonder what the ones you used in Paris looks like. Tell them more in class.

Thus, read your sentences below and determine the correct terms or words appropriate in those sentences. You did great her on this homework!

See you.

-T. Donna~

I get a pride as a Korean when I wear a Hanbok, what is traditional clothes in Korea.

>> I get a pride as a Korean when I wear a Hanbok, which is the traditional clothes in Korea.

I think Hanbok is the most beautiful clothes in the world!

>> Correct!

So I bought 6 Hanboks because I want to wear when I meet my friends and travel to another cites or foreign countries.

>> So I bought 6 Hanboks because I want to wear one when I meet my friends and travel to another city or foreign countries.

I have a black-colored Hanbok with a jumpsuit type. This Hanbok is very comfortable, so I usually wear this when I travel.

>> Correct!

Actually I traveled Paris last year with this Hanbok, and it was in harmony with the scenery of Paris.

>> Correct! Very good sentence!