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Do you think students should bring a lunchbox to school? Why?

차진혁/2024-09-05

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I think students shouldn't bring a lunchbox to school because there is a school meal. School meal is delicious and nutritious. I was bring a lunchbox to school 1 or 2 times because I had a enteritis. So I had to eat porridge.
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Here's another edited essay, Jimmy. I appreciate your sending it. Please go over the revisions given below. Have a good night sleep!  


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                         Do you think students should bring a lunchbox to school? Why?


I think students shouldn't bring a lunchbox to school because there is a school meal.
>> OR: I believe that bringing a lunchbox to school isn't needed because there is a school meal. 

School meal is delicious and nutritious.
>> School meals are delicious and nutritious.

I was bring a lunchbox to school 1 or 2 times because I had a enteritis.
>> I brought a lunchbox to school 1 or 2 times because I had enteritis.

So I had to eat porridge.
>> CORRECT~~
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