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What does having a pet teach children?

차유진/2024-09-05

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Children do Raising a pet is making friends. Playing with pet children feel pleasure and patience. I don't raise a pet but I think like that.
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Here's your correced composition, Yale! Many thanks for sending it. Please take a look at the few revisions and alternative expressions provided. 


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Children do Raising a pet is making friends.
>> Children who raise pets can make friends. 

Playing with pet children feel pleasure and patience.
>> Children feel pleasure and patience when they play with pets.

I don't raise a pet but I think like that.
>> OR: I don't raise a pet but that's what I think. 
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