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A food of taking me back
오혜영/2024-09-05
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As I explain a detailed story, It’s got longer.
I did homework.
plz check the attatchment.
Have a nice day^^
강사님의 첨삭교정 내용
Hello, Stella! Thank you for you wonderful story. It makes me crave kimbap. I like kimbap, too! ^^ Thank you for today's homework. Have fun and enjoy your day.
~T. Jewel
Unfortunately, There is no special local food in my hometown.
>>CORRECT
OR
>>Unfortunately, there aren't any special local foods in my hometown.
However, There is a food takes me back to my childhood.
However, There is a food takes me back to my childhood.
>>However, there is a food that takes me back to my childhood.
My mother is not the best cook, so I'm fortunately not missing the mom's food, except only one food.
My mother is not the best cook, so I'm fortunately not missing the mom's food, except only one food.
>>My mother is not the best cook, so fortunately, I don't miss her cooking, except for one dish.
It's kim-bap in my case.
It's kim-bap in my case.
>>In my case, it's kim-bap.
When I was young, I had to take the runch box on school's picnic day.
When I was young, I had to take the runch box on school's picnic day.
>>When I was young, I had to take a lunch box on the school's picnic day.
My mother was good at beautifully making kim-bap .
My mother was good at beautifully making kim-bap .
>>My mother was good at making kim-bap beautifully.
These days, we can find and eat it everywhere.
These days, we can find and eat it everywhere.
>>CORRECT
OR
>>These days, we can find kim-bap and enjoy it almost everywhere.
But we could not find on usal days, at that time.
But we could not find on usal days, at that time.
>>But we couldn't find it on a regular basis back then.
However, It was not very delicious for me, at that time.
However, It was not very delicious for me, at that time.
>>However, it wasn’t very delicious to me at that time.
Maybe it was that I liked going picnic on school.
Maybe it was that I liked going picnic on school.
>>Maybe it was because I liked going on picnics at school.
but I sometimes feel It take me back to my childhood.
but I sometimes feel It take me back to my childhood.
>>But sometimes it takes me back to my childhood.
And I can remeber the story.
And I can remeber the story.
>>And I can remember the story well.
My mother always asked me that "Is it delicous?" and said how to make it.
My mother always asked me that "Is it delicous?" and said how to make it.
>>My mother always asked me, 'Is it delicious?' and told me how to make it.
And then, I just noded and answered "yes, ok" or "Thanks".
And then, I just noded and answered "yes, ok" or "Thanks".
>>Then, I just nodded and responded with 'Yes, okay' or 'Thanks.'
I can remeber her smiling , feeling and the atmosphare.
I can remeber her smiling , feeling and the atmosphare.
>>I can remember her smiling, the way she felt, and the atmosphere.
So, I like the kim-bap
So, I like the kim-bap
>>So, I really like kim-bap.
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