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Which part of your childhood do you wish you could change? Why?

한다연/2024-09-03

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I want to change my childhood of middle school life. Because when I think now, the middle school student don't have to study too much harder. But, I think that I studied harder and usually went to the academic. To play with friend or do various activities that help 5 sensitives is so helpful that I select the job that I want to be. If I can go to my childhood, I want to say for me 'Just play! And have a fun freely'.
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Hello Nicole,
Thank you for answering your written homework. Continue practicing your writing skills. You did well today!
~ T. Demi ^^

I want to change my childhood of middle school life. Because when I think now, the middle school student don't have to study too much harder. 
>> I want to change my middle school experience from my childhood because now when I think about it, middle school students don't have to study too hard.
But, I think that I studied harder and usually went to the academic. 
>> I think I studied way too hard and usually went to academy lessons.
To play with friend or do various activities that help 5 sensitives is so helpful that I select the job that I want to be. 
>> To play with friends or engage in various activities that engage all five senses is so beneficial that I choose the job I want to pursue.
If I can go to my childhood, I want to say for me 'Just play! And have a fun freely'.
>> If I could go back to my childhood, I would tell myself to "just play and have fun freely."
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