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If you could design your own park, what would you put in it?

박소은/2024-09-03

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I will put trees and I will put some chairs to sit. I will also put snackscar so when someone is hungry they can eat something in the car.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi Sunny!
Your statements are really on point.
They are both direct and expressive.
I also like the examples you gave.
Keep up the good work!^^
~~ Teacher Sharon

I will put trees and I will put some chairs to sit.

>> I will put some trees and I will put some chairs for people to sit on.
I will also put snackscar so when someone is hungry they can eat something in the car.

>> I will also put food trucks so people who feel hungry can eat something.