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김순님/2024-08-30

회원님의 올려주신 영작문
I didn't advice to my 2 sons about saving money. I have never invested of my money. I only save money from bank. I didn't give allowances to them since they graduated at university. I want them to build their lives by themselves. They should adjust their financial skills.
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Ms. Sunny!
Good financial skills can provide a well-off life when we grow older. Young people are fortunate that the older generation are good examples of how to have a stable life even if they did not have a comfortable life in the past.  I hope this will enlighten their minds to take opportunities seriously.
have a good day!
T. Aki~

I didn't advice to my 2 sons about saving money.
>>> I didn't advise my 2 sons about saving money.

I have never invested of my money.
>>> I have never invested my money.

I only save money from bank.
>>>  I only save money from the bank.

I didn't give allowances to them since they graduated at university.
>>> I didn't provide allowances for them since they graduated from the university.

I want them to build their lives by themselves.
>>> CORRECT!

They should adjust their financial skills.
>>> CORRECT!
OR >> They should,d have proper financial skills.
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