I was born in Jeju island and lived there for long time.
I love my hometown where is buried my parents and have memories of my childhood .
I will often visit there is the beautiful scenery .
However, I moved to Seoul after got married
and I think I'm going to settle down in the future.
So, I'll live my old life missing Jeju island forever~~
Hi Young Soon!
Be careful with showing relationship and connection between different parts of sentences.
Choose the appropriate ideas to express what you mean.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
I was born in Jeju island and lived there for long time.
>> I was born in Jeju Island and I had lived there for a long time.
I love my hometown where is buried my parents and have memories of my childhood .
>> I love the hometown where my parents are buried and where I created so many childhood memories.
I will often visit there is the beautiful scenery .
>> I visit there often for the beautiful scenery.
However, I moved to Seoul after got married
>> However, I moved to Seoul after I got married.
and I think I'm going to settle down in the future.
>> I think that we have already settled down here.
So, I'll live my old life missing Jeju island forever~~
>> So, when I get older, I'll just live my life missing Jeju Island forever.