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The most frightening disease

양기연/2024-08-27

회원님의 올려주신 영작문

I am most afraid of pancreatic cancer and dementia,perhaps because I saw my father's suffering and death and I have seen my mom suffering from dementia. Pancreatic cancer,like my father's case,is difficult to detect and operate,so it has the highest mortality rate. That's why I am frightened with the cancer and I have tried to make much effort to avoid developing the cancer. And I think that dementia is the terrible thing because it is distressing for the patients not to notice their family and to forget their good memories.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hello, Gi Yean!

I agree! In all cases of cancer, people will agree that it is indeed scary. I think another scary part about the diseases you've mentioned is the fact that they are hereditary. So having a family history of these requires us to be extra careful compared to those without a history.

- T. Caitlyn

I am most afraid of pancreatic cancer and dementia,perhaps because I saw my father's suffering and death and I have seen my mom suffering from dementia.

>> CORRECT

Pancreatic cancer,like my father's case,is difficult to detect and operate,so it has the highest mortality rate.

>> Pancreatic cancer, like in my father's case, is difficult to detect and operate on, so it has the highest mortality rate.

That's why I am frightened with the cancer and I have tried to make much effort to avoid developing the cancer.

>> That's why I am frightened of the cancer, and I put a lot of effort to avoid developing it.

And I think that dementia is the terrible thing because it is distressing for the patients not to notice their family and to forget their good memories.

>> And I think that dementia is a terrible thing because it is distressing for patients not to recognize their family and to forget their good memories.