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The next cutting edge technology after the smartphone

김창민/2024-08-23

회원님의 올려주신 영작문

I think the technology of smart watch get improved for replace the smartphone. The bigger the camera of smartphone is, the heavier the weight is. So I guess there will be demand to possess more portable smartphone. Now people can buy merchandise who have a smart watch of Galaxy series. So I guess the smart watch can replace smartphone.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hello, Min!

The smart watch already has features that the smartphone has but not totally. As time goes by, I agree that more and more Apps as well as functions will be present in the smart watch technology.

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I think the technology of smart watch get improved for replace the smartphone.

>> I think the technology of smart watch gets improved to replace the smartphone.

The bigger the camera of smartphone is, the heavier the weight is.

>> Correct!

Or: The bigger the camera of smartphone is, the heavier the weight becomes.

So I guess there will be demand to possess more portable smartphone.

>> Correct!

Now people can buy merchandise who have a smart watch of Galaxy series.

>> Correct!

So I guess the smart watch can replace smartphone.

>> Correct!