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My train ticket booking preparing Chuseok

김창민/2024-08-23

회원님의 올려주신 영작문
First, I succeeded in booking train ticket to go to Seoul on September 13. After the class, I accessed the web site to book ticket. But there are more than 13,000 people who were already connected in front of me! I decided to just wait until my turn came back, because I had to start again from the beginning when I pushed the back buttons! About an 1 hour 30 minutes after, I got the chance to book tickets. Fortunately, there are a few seats when I want to take a train! So I could book my train ticket easily. I was lucky!
강사님의 첨삭교정 내용
Hello again, Min!

Lucky you! Congratulations for booking a ticket to your way to Europe! A seat was meant for you and due to your patience and good decisions, you were able to reserve one in less than two hours. 

Sometimes the best thing to do is to wait and see. Today, this materialized. I am so happy for you!

Below, your sentences are very well put all together. Your ideas flow smoothly as well as the grammar. Take note of the use of 'a' as a non-specific description to a noun. In addition, there are conjunctions best suitable to connect ideas in your sentences.

You did great on your composition!

See you.

-T. Donna~

First, I succeeded in booking train ticket to go to Seoul on September 13.
>> First, I succeeded in booking a train ticket to go to Seoul on September 13.

After the class, I accessed the web site to book ticket.
>> After the class, I accessed the web site to book a ticket.

But there are more than 13,000 people who were already connected in front of me!
>> But there are more than 13,000 people who were already connected before me!

I decided to just wait until my turn came back, because I had to start again from the beginning when I pushed the back buttons!
>> Correct! Very good sentence!

About an 1 hour 30 minutes after, I got the chance to book tickets.
>> About an hour and 30 minutes after, I got the chance to book tickets.

Fortunately, there are a few seats when I want to take a train!
>> Correct!

So I could book my train ticket easily. I was lucky!
>> Correct!
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