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What affects your decision-making?

이지윤/2024-08-23

회원님의 올려주신 영작문

A lot of things affect my decision-making. This includes money, time, etc. When there are many companies that I have passed, money also affects the part that determines the company and also affects various rental and living expenses. The hours include commuting and working hours. The distance part also influences decision making. Everyone is the same, but I don't like being far from the company. Also, my parents' opinions are one of considerations. I don't necessarily follow my parents' opinions, but some of them are reflected in my decision-making.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hello, Yun!

While I know that making decisions can be tough at times, I hope that we always make the right option and learn from seemingly terrible choices. ^_^

Chammy

A lot of things affect my decision-making.
This includes money, time, etc.

>>Correct
When there are many companies that I have passed, money also affects the part that determines the company and also affects various rental and living expenses.

>>When I passed interviews with several companies, money also played a factor in accepting job offers, as well as the rental price and other expenses.
The hours include commuting and working hours. The distance part also influences decision-making.

>> When it comes to the schedule, I also consider commuting aside from the working hours as the distance also influences my decision-making.

Everyone is the same, but I don't like being far from the company.

>>Correct
Also, my parents' opinions are one of considerations.

>> Also, my parents' opinions are one of the considerations.

I don't necessarily follow my parents' opinions, but some of them are reflected in my decision-making.

>> I don't necessarily follow my parents' opinions, but some of them reflects in my decision-making.