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Searching for my symptoms online

양기연/2024-08-23

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When I am sick or feel uncomfortable with a certain part of my body,I search for the symptoms online. There was a time when I was blacked out and I had a temporary memory loss for about 20 minutes. My husband and daughters were surprised and I was shocked at that time. After my family and I searched for the symptoms online, we were relieved. This way, I use online to search for any symptoms or some treatments. But I don't necessarily follow the remedies or treatments.

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Hi, Gi Yean!

I see! I also sometimes search for my symptoms online, and while the results can be relieving, they can also be scary due to the many diseases and illnesses that have similar symptoms.

- T. Caitlyn

When I am sick or feel uncomfortable with a certain part of my body, I search for the symptoms online.

>> CORRECT

There was a time when I was blacked out and I had a temporary memory loss for about 20 minutes.

>> There was a time when I blacked out and had temporary memory loss for about 20 minutes.

My husband and daughters were surprised and I was shocked at that time.

>> CORRECT

After my family and I searched for the symptoms online, we were relieved.

>>After my family and I searched for symptoms online, we were relieved.

This way, I use online to search for any symptoms or some treatments.

>> This is how I use the internet to search for symptoms or treatments.

But I don't necessarily follow the remedies or treatments.

>> CORRECT