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Is the traditional ways of behavior are no longer relevant to the modern life?

이진태/2024-08-20

회원님의 올려주신 영작문
I think some traditional ways still need for our lives. We still eat food similar cooking our ancestors. Also, we still live under the social structure made ancestors.
강사님의 첨삭교정 내용
 Hi! I’m so glad you completed the homework. You did an outstanding job communicating your experiences and ideas—keep up the fantastic work!^^
~~Teacher Ryka^^

I think some traditional ways still need for our lives.
>> I believe that some traditional ways are still essential in our lives.

We still eat food similar cooking our ancestors.
>> We continue to eat food prepared in ways similar to how our ancestors cooked. 

Also, we still live under the social structure made ancestors.
>> Additionally, we still live within the social structures established by our ancestors.
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