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What was the most interesting place you have ever visited?

맹준영/2024-08-19

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I don't have much experience oversea travel. Last year, My family and i went to Hong Kong for winter vacation. We visited many cities. Among them, Makao was so amazing. There are a lot of giant hotel and many luxury store. At night, We saw wonderful night view of Makao. Maybe I can't forget that. And there is a casino on the 1floor of the hotel. The casino was opened 24hours. I didn't visit there because i don't like gamble. Go to Makao is so expensive, but watching a huge view of many building is so nice experience.
강사님의 첨삭교정 내용
Hello, Jun!
It sounds like you had a blast. ^^ Please tell me more about your travels next time. :)
~ Teacher Trixia

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I don't have much experience oversea travel.
- I don't have much experience with overseas travel.
Last year, My family and i went to Hong Kong for winter vacation.
- Last year, my family and I went to Hong Kong for winter vacation.
We visited many cities. 

- We visited many cities.

Among them, Makao was so amazing.
- Among them, Macao was so amazing.
There are a lot of giant hotel and many luxury store.
- There are a lot of giant hotels and many luxury stores.
At night, We saw wonderful night view of Makao. 

- At night, we saw a wonderful night view of Macao.

Maybe I can't forget that.
- Maybe I can't forget that.
And there is a casino on the 1floor of the hotel. 

- And there is a casino on the first floor of the hotel.

The casino was opened 24hours.
- The casino was open 24 hours a day.
I didn't visit there because i don't like gamble.
- I didn't visit there because I don't like to gamble.
Go to Makao is so expensive, but watching a huge view of many building is so nice experience.
- Going to Makao is so expensive, but watching a huge view of many buildings is such a nice experience.
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