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류건우/2024-08-16

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Q: What are the sacrifices that people with ambitions should make? A: I think it's their health and their time. Since they need to work more than others, they can't have enough rest, so their mental and physical health would go worse. Also, they need to grind a lot of time to achieve their goals,

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi, Paul!

Thank you for doing your homework.

~T. Divina^^

Here are some corrections:

1. I think it's their health and their time.

>>CORRECT!

2. Since they need to work more than others, they can't have enough rest, so their mental and physical health would go worse.

>>Since they need to work more than the others, they couldn't have enough rest, so their mental and physical health could go worse.

3. Also, they need to grind a lot of time to achieve their goals.

>>Also, they need to grind for a lot of time to achieve their goals.